A Great Query Letter

Mr. Agent
1234 Important St., Fifth Floor
New York, NY 90210

Dear Agent:

When everyone that young Xandr holds dear is massacred by bloodthirsty bogrens, can this prophesied future leader survive the beasts and ultimately discover his fate, save his true love, and protect his planetary paradise from epic destruction using only his wits and Emmaxis—a mighty, ancient sword?

Based on the illustrious authors you represent, I feel you will be interested in my novel, Ages of Aenya, which offers an eclectic mix of fantasy and science fiction. It is 157,677 words.

Millennia ago, the sun expanded into a red giant, threatening to incinerate the planet of Aenya. To escape annihilation, the inhabitants constructed a machine to move their planet, but something went terribly wrong: one hemisphere became a scorching desert as the other became an icy wasteland, destroying most life on the planet. But amid these extremes, a paradise formed—Ilmarinen—and from its few remaining people, a hero.

When this destined leader, Xandr, meets the beautiful Thelana, she is dangling naked from a hook, her arm reaching for a stone idol. But Xandr can do nothing to save her from the angry zealots defending the temple—who feel she is a demon in disguise—lest he reveal himself a traitor. Yet the henna patterned across Thelana’s body tells Xandr that she is like him—one of the last Ilmarin—and he must stop at nothing to rescue her.

As fate brings love into his life, Xandr chooses to fight for a world that rejects him. To prevent a second world-shaping cataclysm, he and Thelana must follow the clues contained in a history book from the future, the Ages of Aenya, all while battling violent amphibious races, avian kings, snake men, time-traveling lunatics, and a giant born from the stars.

I have been honing the writing craft since I was six years old. My first attempt at publication was at DC Comics headquarters in New York City at the age of nine. I received my BA in English from the University of South Florida where I studied fiction, literature, and ancient history at the graduate level.

The completed manuscript is available upon request. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
Nick Alimonos
Read the prologue here

2 thoughts on “A Great Query Letter

  1. Kind of random, but something just occurred to me when I was reading this letter- When I first read City by the Sea, which was in like 8th or 9th grade, I never understood why Thelana being one of the last Illmarin was so important to Xandr. I mean like I understood the abstract reasoning for it, but I could not empathize at all. It wasn't until I got much older that I finally got how that could matter so much, especially to someone like Xandr who feels so alone.

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  2. It's frightening to think how long ago this story has been rattling around inside my head. The characters have evolved for over a decade into living, breathing people. When I started writing this book, I was younger than Xandr, and now I am much older. I do believe that with maturity comes perspective. Once, I only cared about action and adventure. But now, it matters more to me why a character does or doesn't do something. Originally, Xandr didn't care to rescue Thelana; he saw her as a killer and a thief. There was little nuance to his sense of morality. In the new version, Xandr's loneliness trumps any other motivation—no matter what, he must save Thelana, because he needs her, because she is the only other person in the world who can truly hope to understand him and his culture. If you read carefully, you will see that loneliness is a recurring theme in my work and in “Ages of Aenya.”

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